shin
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 | Subject: THE ZOMBIE  Mon Mar 09, 2015 6:03 pm | |
| [b]Ship Name- "THE ZOMBIE" [b]owner- Shin [b]Crew name-THE SLEEPLESS [b]Side-PIRATE [b]Ship type-caravel [b]Outer description  [b]Inner description-25 rooms that are falling apart,and is powered by sails,long hallways with weird rooms full of dead bodies hanging from the ceiling, 2 kitchens with organs in them for my crew to eat... [b]History-this ship use to belong to black bread himself, intil my father stole it, and gave it to me when i became a pirate. when people see the "ZOMBIE" they know that death is on its way..
Last edited by shin on Tue Mar 10, 2015 4:31 pm; edited 4 times in total (Reason for editing : fixing it) | |
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Aidoneus
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| | Subject: Re: THE ZOMBIE Mon Mar 09, 2015 6:37 pm | |
| "Battleship" is not only vague, but not actually the type of ship that you have described. You have also removed owner from the ship, which should be replaced with something like "owner: shin" or "owner: undetermined". The history is also inadequate; it doesn't explain anything.
I suppose the rest is acceptable, but I'd reccomend a more in depth description of the inside personally. | |
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shin
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| | Subject: Re: THE ZOMBIE Mon Mar 09, 2015 8:58 pm | |
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Aidoneus
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| | Subject: Re: THE ZOMBIE Tue Mar 10, 2015 12:22 pm | |
| You can check wikipedia for types of ships. Once we have one that fits, you will receive conditional approval (meaning when your other stuff is approved, this will be). | |
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shin
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| | Subject: Re: THE ZOMBIE Tue Mar 10, 2015 4:31 pm | |
| ok i found the ship online | |
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| | Subject: Re: THE ZOMBIE Tue Mar 10, 2015 9:32 pm | |
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