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PostSubject: Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru   Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 5:13 pm

Name:Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru

Age:15

Bounty:10,000,000 belli

Species: Human

Occupation: Swordsmen

Allegiance: The Blue Phoenix Pirates

Home Village/Ocean: Not Available.

Appearance: Tensain stands five foot three inches weighing one hundred and seventy two pounds. He is mostly dressed in a black leather jacket a black and white plat scarf white t-shirt black jeans and black tennis shoes. On his face is a black dash under the right eye and the number 69 above the line. His hair is somewhat uncoordinated and is spiky. He has a small amount of muscles upon his arms and legs.

History: Many years ago during a civil war upon the north blue Tensain's mother was impregnated. At the time his mother and father where sailing to the southern parts of the ocean. While within the beginning of the trip the ship was hit with a cannon. Many of the others who sailed upon it where injured. The cannon sent shards of wood and small particles of iron into the air. Unfortunately his father was near the edge of the ship where the cannon collided. He was killed upon impact. His mother, shocked, rushed towards the smaller boats to escape. The fear within her caused her to give birth a month early. Then while entering the boats she gave birth. Not a single doctor was around to help her delives nor supply the propper tools needed to help. Eventually the pain caused her to loose her life and Tensain was taken in by a strange man upon the ship. His eyes where strange from the others within his family. They where black in the pupil and crimson red within the cornea. Most of the others upon the boat where afraid and called him a demon from the color of his eyes. They feared him but Atsu did not. Atsu,He was an extremely well trained army soldier. He was at the age of thirty five while on the ship and his wife was killed from the cannon. Atsu trained Tensain in fighting with a sword. He told him of the powers within him just the sight of his eyes. For three more years Atsu held back the story of his family and what happened upon the ship. He continued to train Tensain until the next year. He became extremely sick and was upon his death bed. Atsu told Tensain the entire story of what happened to his family. Tensain understood and showed no signs of anger nor depression. Three hours later Atsu passed away. He had taught Tensain everything he new and even told him of the powers that Tensain had within him. His final words to him where to go out and become the richest pirate there is. While doing this Tensain knew he was not fully prepared for the other fighters there where out within the world. He went out on his own and one day came into a village without a leader and name. Tensain challenged the best fighter there. The man he fought stood nine feet tall he had broad shoulders and was severely muscular. He used a kanabo. The man's name was Agustin. Tensain spoke begin and then charged. Without notice the man used extreme speeds and came to the right of Tensain. Tensain,unprepared, was hit as the Agustin swung the large kanabo. It collided with his shoulder and sent him flying. He smashed into a tree and was not hurt severely but he was knocked out cold. The next day, covered in dirt, he awoke without memory of what happened nor where he was and why was he lying upon the ground. Though out of all of this he remembered his name and age. After hours of trying to remember the thought of becoming rich rang within his ears. A large grin came on his face and he then knew what he must do, become the richest pirate there is was and will be.

Personality:Tensain is a somewhat comical young man. He is silent and sometimes talkative. Within battle he keeps his calm. Most of the time when not fighting he is either drawing or laughing with others. He is calm cool and relaxed and he worries of nothing.

Ship: Ever Flare

Ships Flag:https://2img.net/h/i1218.photobucket.com/albums/dd416/KureiEndocide/Kurei1.png

Devil Fruit:None at the moment
type: --
effect: --

Special Abilities: Tensain has intense speeds that turn him into a black blur though within this same time he is unnoticed and his footsteps give no sorts of sound. His body, to the outside viewer, merges with the shadows and and from the most unexpected area he appears. He has the power to manipulate matter into energy to he can use as he wishes. When he begins this process he places the item within his right hand and it turns into a white glow. The item then forms into a white orb and Tensain uses it as he wishes. He also has in-human strength, so far he has not found a certain weight limit to hold him down and he does not struggle with lifting three tons.

Learned Techniques (Keep it 1-25): wrestling, boxing, karate.

Weapons/Items:Three katana.

Goals: Find out about his past. Remember what happened and eventually become the richest and strongest pirate there is.
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PostSubject: Re: Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru   Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 5:37 pm

appearance and personality are far to short to be considered, special abilities needs to be uncluttered and sorted properly

further one cannot change mater in to energy with out a devil fruit, perhaps you havent even actually seen one piece...

come to think of it the shadow power and strength are also totally nonsensical

Character rejected for this and other reasons

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PostSubject: Re: Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru   Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 11:03 pm

I really don't see why you would deny this approval. Does this not fit your standard Admin-sama? Honestly, it looks passable to me. The personality segment is also really strong, brevity is the soul of wit and all that. I really admire the paradoxical nature of the character's mind, showing how all of us have a duality.










or maybe it's just shit. 
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PostSubject: Re: Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru   Tensain (Deception Of Truth) Disaru Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 11:03 pm

Excellent use of the sites sarcastic color olive
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