| RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello | |
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| Subject: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 4:04 am | |
| Name:Nightwing (Angel Of Death )
Age:24
Bounty:10,000 berri
Species: Skypiean
Occupation: Sniper/thief Allegiance: Pirate(Black Berri)
Home Village/Ocean: Skypiea
Appearance:A Cute Girl With Black Wings, Black Dress,Long black hair with antenna's on top.Black lipstick, Wicked Smile, Carries a Rifle, Has The word Exiled Burned on her back, and Black tears tattooed to her cheek's, She normally wears a black robe over her dress with a hood that cover's her face. She normally, stares at you with her cold Lifeless Crimson Eyes that make you tremble with fear.
History:As a little girl she lived with her grand parents, her grandfather taught her out to shoot.after they died of old age. she started to steal and get in fights to erase the pain. getting older she started killing people She wanted them to feel like she did. After Being exiled From skypiea for Murder She screamed as they burning here banishment on her back with the words exiled, she started a killing rampage full of rage, from one island yo the next she shot and killed Human's, She started to like it. Until she met Unholy, not being able to kill the giant she quickly became friends with him sense they had so much in common (Killing Humans) After Joining Him She she feel's more at home and views Unholy As a father figure, finally she was at peace knowing this is where she belongs now and Quietly Awaits In the crow's nest on the ship grim death until needed.
Personality:Very Evil, Enjoys seeing people get shot and panicking, Always has a Wicked Smile, Loves to Kill humans, Hides From Plane Sight Until She Kills someone.Very angry about being exiled. When wounded she stares at you with pity, Will do anything she wants and any way possible, just to forget about the pain of loosing her grandparents. Somewhere deep down inside a little girl is screaming to get out. Not realizing doing these horrid things she has become a monster.
Ship:Grim Death
Ship Flag: Fake Marine Flag
Devil Fruit: none type: (only if you have a devil fruit) effect: (only if you have a devil fruit)
Special Abilities: powers excluding the devil fruit not techniques for example a sword style 1)Soru, fast movement 2)Dark Shot,From a great distance Carefully aims her Rifle and shoots her enemy. 3)Rapid Shots. Takes Both her Pistols and rapidly shooting enemy's 4)Geppou,allows the users to actually jumps off the air itself, allowing them to stay in the air for much longer than usual. Weapons/Items: Rifle,twin Pistols Axe Dial,Reject Dial (x10 force), Goals: To complete eradicate all human's For skypeans are far superior
Last edited by UnholyJoe on Mon Mar 22, 2010 6:57 am; edited 6 times in total |
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Redmerv Admin
Posts : 1982 Join date : 2009-02-07 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 7:51 am | |
| I am not sure about this one I will let anorther admin have a look at this | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 6:36 pm | |
| Well let me know if i need to change anything please |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:07 pm | |
| Looking for an admin to let me know what i need to get this char approved |
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Irrational Admin
Posts : 1284 Join date : 2008-07-20 Age : 35 Location : No one needs to know.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:08 pm | |
| Skypiens only have vestigial wings. They are incapable of unassisted flight. | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:10 pm | |
| My bad i took out the dark flight and replaced it with soru & Geppou, is that cool? |
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Irrational Admin
Posts : 1284 Join date : 2008-07-20 Age : 35 Location : No one needs to know.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:15 pm | |
| Expand on appearance and personality. The character is rather bland. I would also prefer you add more to history, though it is not necessary. | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:32 pm | |
| Ok ive added some more of everything hope it's enough |
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Irrational Admin
Posts : 1284 Join date : 2008-07-20 Age : 35 Location : No one needs to know.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 8:49 pm | |
| Just remember that the reject dial can not be used often, and when it is used, deals powerful damage to its user as well. APPROVED | |
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keymaster
Posts : 4636 Join date : 2008-09-10 Age : 31 Location : Oh, out and about. Hither and Thither.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 11:22 pm | |
| Description could be a little better. Everyone has different interpretations of "Hot Girl", [like myself, I'm more fond of "cute" girls with no curves] so unless you'd like others to think differently of it, I suggest you sort of expand upon it. See, if you're a male describing a female character you have to step outside the comfort zone and be detailed without being "perverted". I'm not revoking approval for this since it is not in my power to do so, but it would greatly help.
[and I'm serious about my preferences] | |
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Irrational Admin
Posts : 1284 Join date : 2008-07-20 Age : 35 Location : No one needs to know.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Thu Mar 18, 2010 11:23 pm | |
| I would agree with you in this regard. Approval wont be revoked, but please edit. | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Fri Mar 19, 2010 12:12 am | |
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keymaster
Posts : 4636 Join date : 2008-09-10 Age : 31 Location : Oh, out and about. Hither and Thither.
| Subject: Re: RIP: Nightwing Frozen to Death By Martello Sat Mar 20, 2010 12:10 am | |
| You just kinda changed it from "Hot" to "Cute"...nothing different. | |
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